One day a mentally deranged maniac built a bomb capable of blowing up the world and demanded 9.5 billion dollars in cash to defuse the bomb. Then at that time a space shuttle came in a nose dive to earth just as a way of gamma radiation hit. Then it landed and its young pilot named Chrystler Morning Star stepped out.
Chrystler Morning Star was just a normal boy until he was caught in a gamma radiation wave as he reentered earths atmosphere like he had caught the flu just a week ago and was genetically altered and was given the speed of sound and light together and then some, the strength of all people past, present, and future, he has the knowledge to do anything and everything, and his sense of nature is so good he has the power of every living or extinct animal. One day Chrystler was told to find the bomb that threatens to destroy the world.
After long day of research he found that its not were but when to look for the bomb. So he worked day and night to build a portable time machine and finished it a day after. He traveled back in time but to far and ended up in the time of the dinos. On the way he saw he dropped his machine and ran all the way around the continent and he was so fast he split the 1 big continent into 7 smaller continents. Soon he got to his destination in time and tried to defuse the bomb.
When he saw the bomb he ran up to it only to find it guarded by 120 men. The fight was fierce, and one by one the men guarding it fell down. Only that they were like ants. It was they fell and got back up or they fell and 3 more took their place. The timer on the bomb was ticking down,”10…9…8…7…” he had to settle this quick. Then a loud boom shook the area and all the guards fell and no more came. Finally he could defuse the bomb. “4…3…2…1…” it stopped and he never touched it, then he saw his time travel machine was interfering with it. The chance he had hopped for came and he defused the bomb saving the world like no one else could.
He was a hero. He had saved the world and turned in the most wanted villain throughout the continents. He finally returned home and kicked back and turned on the T.V. Finally he could rela… “HELP! Some one is threatening to blow up Missouri!” Here we go again.
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The End?
5 comments:
Dear Brendan,
Your story was really good with the super hero thing, but it seemed to me that it was rushed.
your classmate
Abby
Dear Zebrafish#10
Your story is very original and you could use a few more details
From Charlie A. Jones (Zebrafish#016)
Dear Zebrafish010
That was a great story.There were a few typo's but otherwise i liked it
Dear Zebrafish 010,
Your main character was ery talented and I wonder how you thought of him. Your story was good but you had quite a few errors, a lot f run-ons, and could use a few details. It seems you didn't go back and check your story or just rushed through it to get it done aand turned in. It really helps to read out loud when checking your story.
Sincerely,
Mark Mako
brendan, your story was top noch but it ended suddenly
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